|
Solidshoes-Fanfic Reviews
By solidshoe
Night at the FanFics
Fan Fic chapter’s up for review
by SolidShoe
Since many fanfic writers don’t get much attention , even during reviews, I thought I’d spend an evening
reading the current chapter of EACH of the new stories, not just the hyped ones, which is more fair to all
fanfic writers.
So, got some popcorn? Here we go:
Aquatica:Jurassic Park-Chapter 1
By Spinoboy 11
“Go turn on the engine, we'll get away from this area.”
This was the first Story I read last night. After being bombarded by a huge Pic of nice aquatic Dinosaur art
and a few red slash marks, I proceeded to read the story. After reading the initial paragraph, in which the
author states that statistical information will be provided when each dino makes an appearance, I jumped
right into the story. To be blunt, Aquatica moves much faster than I would have liked for a story dealing
with unique aquatic dinosaurs. The writing is acceptable, and some of the dialog is actually pretty good
given how short the chapter was. However, while this chapter tries to be suspenseful and heart pounding, it
ultimately fails at that when the first attack comes, simply because the total description, including the name
of the dino, is printed in parenthesis, totally destroying any suspense as to what attacked the people. It
basically amounted to reading a picture book. There is NO element of surprise, and I found myself
wondering why I should that the person in the end picked up a shotgun and walked into the room.
Prediction for Aquatica= Though a good attempt at a new style of writing, IMO, more thought should be
put into the format. Spino seems good with dialog and desrciption, and I can’t help but feel that a regular
story would suit his style better. 3.5 out of 10
Leviathans Rewritten- Act 2
by Vadar
"You're lying. You wanted to marry me, Russell. Don't deny it."
Vadar’s rewritten story, Leviathans, seems to be all the rage at the moment. One person even went as far as
to give it five stars, even though the story is far from finished. Pretty incredible, don’t you think? Well, how
could I NOT review a chapter from this story? Well, I was ready for great things, not because I’m familiar
with Vadar’s work (because i’m not), but simply because of all the hype. So is Leviathans worthy? Lets
have a look.
I don’t doubt that Vadar has a vision. This chapter was very long, with lots of dialogue and plenty of action.
Pangea sounds like the perfect plot-device. So does it work? Yes.....and no. First off, the dialogue was a
bit....shifty. I felt like I was watching a made for television movie (the high quality ones, like TNT), instead
of watching a full blown epic. You know...all the elements are there, but the camera angles or the music is
just all wrong? Same thing here. Everything is just shy of being fantastic. The opening conversation in this
chapter almost turned me away. The knock-out was decently described, but not more so. The cavern seen
was full of plot-devices that sounded good, but I simply didn’t feel like I was there. Basically, I feel Vader’s
detail is astounding, only it lacks emotion (artists know what I mean). Is this the best fanfic I’ve read?
Certainly not. Is it good? Without a doubt. 7.5 out of 10
Jurassic Park IV: Evolution PART 9
By Carnotaur3
“Ah, shit!”
I clicked on this one not having any previous experience with the author whatsoever. Hmmmm, part
9...would this chapter be good enough to lure me into reading the entire fanfic? Let’s see....
Two things came to mind when reading this story: Cheesy and Enjoyable. You ever watched a movie that
was so bad it was funny or cool? This is that story. Carnotaur never really seems to take himself seriously,
unlike many other authors (myself included) who simply try too hard and mess up. You get the sense that
Carnotuar3 is just as happy as can be while he’s writing, and I could feel that energy. This chapter was long,
hoaky, bloody, corny, funny....the sum of all the parts was just fun. It helped that I didn’t hear a thing about
this story, because while reading it, I just enjoyed myself. Sure, people get ripped through windows with
the simplest descriptions, heads go rolling, etc, but the fact remains, I came away pleased. Is this my fav fan
fic at the moment? No :P Is it funny and silly and bloody and all that fun stuff? YES! 8.0 out of 10
Jurassic Park: Evolution Factor: Chaos
by Rex-Defender
“I have a proposal for you.”
I won’t beat around the bush. This chapter bored me to tears. The entire chapter is formatted into two
huge paragraphs in red, and this is one of the instances where I can justly say the format was the greater of
the two evils. The picture is good, basic, but good, but the entire chapter is simply a long conversation: it’s
a teaser for an event, and a poor one at that. I just don’t care what happens in the next chapter, which is not
a good sign. However, I will admit, that this story had a very good chance to succeed if the author just
takes his time, gets rid of the red, and makes the chapters more interactive, and not just about two people
takling. I won’t give this story a rating because it just feels so incomplete...it’s like a piece of a piece of a
chapter....and that’s not good.... No rating available
Jurassic Park: Chaos
by Dark Chaos
'WHEN DINOSAURS RULED THE EARTH'
This story has some definite potential. The biggest problem with it is that all the sentences are run-ons, or
fragments, or just plain wrong. Not being the most gifted English student on the block, I decided to look at
the story for what it said, and not what looked to be wrong with it from the start. This story has some
awesome descriptions in it. They’re not overwinded and drawn out (something I suffer from), and they
seem just right. You always have some idea of what the guy\girl is talking about. I also like the fact that
this story uses a lizard as it’s first notable character (something I tried with the Prolouge Chaotic Existence),
and it plays out really well. What I didn’t like about this story is that it moves WAY too fast. I don’t wanna
hear all of this in one chapter. What surprised me about this story is that I didn’t mind the absence of
dialogue at all. That’s how good the main setting was. I didn’t need to hear bickering and drivel, I was just
taken into the scene. Chaos gets my vote for “Fan-fic to watch”. It’s not perfect by any means, but if the
author can fix some basic grammer errors, and not throw all the plot at you in one stroke, this one will shine
as one of best. 7.0 out of 10
Iceteria
by Carnaraptor
"I won't answer you till I get through grading these. Continue on, Im listening"
Wow, a chapter one :P You know how important a first chapter is right? So does Iceteria chapter one have
me begging for more? While begging for chapter 2, I certainly am not, I can say that I do the idea behind
this one. Now I won’t lie and say Its because this was a damn fine chapter, cause it was mearly ok. We
have a student bickering with is professor, ala the intro to Lost World the novel, ala EVERY other fan-fic on
this site. And it’s predicatable too. You just know the ‘bloody’ professor will get proven wrong. What will
continue to draw me to this story is the fact that I wanna see how the whole glacier theory turns out. The
mere suggestion that the story could be interesting was actually better than the actual chapter, so whether or
not that’s a good thing or bad, is up to you. I say read it. 6.5 out of 10
GENESIS Beyond the Darkness
by Alangrant5
“Those things were raptors,”
I like Alangrant5, seeing as how he was one of the only people who ever gave my fanfic a chance. I felt I
owed him the courtesy, and read his latest story. Having only read snipits of Alan’s other stories, I kinda
sorta had an idea of what I was getting into: A very well written JP traditional story. So was I surprised?
Nope. This is the my fav story at the moment, because of a few reasons. A: It’s about as close to the actual
JP novels that I’ve (B: Alan’s style in this one is EXACTLY the style I used in my first fan fic JP
Revalations, so this is like going back through time (C: For being a short chapter, this is just about perfect.
I got about as much enjoyment reading this, as I got writing my first fan-fic, because the energy is there. If
Alan can keep it up, this will be one of the best Traditional stories of the year, if not THE best.
Award of Excellence ****** 9 out of 10
Amazon
by Goldenrex
“I’ll be needing it trust me”
Certainly an interesting name. I like the fact that this story is from a first person point of view. It’s
different, and certainly not something you see everyday on Danspage. I can’t really find fault with this
chapter. It does what it’s supposed to do, and it does it well. The author is setting up the story, and while I
was a little bored, I understand that most great stories start off slow. I will say that the dialogue was superb,
simply because it was realistic, and not entirely robotic. The descriptions were far above average, and the
premise is entirely believable. In short, I want to know where this is going, and I will read it from here on in.
I like this one as much as Genesis, but for an entirely different reason. It’s not a traditional JP story, and
that’s a GOOD thing.
Award for Excellence******Amazon 8.5 out of 10
Jurassic Park IV Trailer
by Icebreaker
“SPRING 2002 “
Trailers are simple. Either they work or they don’t. If it works, I’ll read the story. If not, I won’t waste my
time. So does this trailer work? Surprisingly, no....I was really expecting more. Though this is admittedly a
teaser trailer. Grants back, and he needs to take some people through a jungle. He looks at the ground
‘solemnly”, and at that point, I could care less. Nothing flashed across my brain while reading this trailer. I
wasn’t disappointed, but I can’t honestly say that I’m exactly excited by Icebreaker’s last story. Does this
mean the story will suck? Of Course not. I’ve only heard the best in regards to Icebreaker’s stories. Does
this trailer suck? Yeah, it does, but so do a lot of them, and the end results are usually better.
No rating given***
1/14/02 10:33:26 AM
Comment on this fan fiction!
|
|
|
