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Carno3's Day out with the Fan-Fics PART 1
By Carnotaur3
NOTE: Anything I say is just honest about hwo I felt about the story. Please, don't take it personally! These are just reviews!
LEVIATHANS- By Vader
I heard a lot about this from so many people, so I decided to check this out after he asked me for a review. Did it do it for me? Let’s check and see.
ACT I
The thing I like about Vader is that he’s really descriptive with his work. A thing not many people, including me, have. That’s what makes a writer. His descriptions in this story are GREAT. Not too mention his great dialogue between the characters. But I did feel too much going on in the first chapter, but besides that it was very interesting.
8.0 out of 10.0
ACT II
Very interesting chapter in this series. I like how you thought it out. VERY LONG! But one thing was in my mind the whole time reading it. Where are the carnivores? When’s the action gonna get picked up? I guess only I have to keep reading to find out in the next chapters.
7.5 out of 10.0
ACT III
Shorter than it’s other chapters, it’s still really interesting. Though by now, I’m waiting for some sort of action to occur. With it going like this the whole time, it just might get a little boring. As I will say, I’m not trying to offend anyone. Nevertheless, it’s still a cool addition to your story, but without action it’ll just be boring. Hoping for the next Act to be somewhat fast paced!
7.5 out of 10.0
FIREBIRD LEGACY- By firebird
I clicked on this story thinking it was some sort of dinosaur story. I can not rate this story, because it has nothing to do with Jurassic Park or anything even related, but I will say it took loads of thinking. Just that the details needed to be more descriptive. Improve on that and your all set!
ICETERIA- By CarnaRaptor
Hmmm… Heard about this story for a while too. Is it worth the read though? Let’s check it out!
CHAPTER 1
Good approach to this story, but the fact still remained that this story seemed to have related more to The Lost World book than to it’s own originality. A scene with the professor and the student just seems more like the same thing in The Lost World. The dialogue was good at times and just not good enough at times. I felt the author though was trying to get something good. I can’t really say he failed at it, but just didn’t do his best overall. And I can’t say that this wasn’t entertaining, because it was.
6.5 out of 10.0
CHAPTER 2
SEX!!! YES, SEX!!! Although it was a little funny, I felt this scene wasn’t really what the story needed. This scene could have been left out and been good without it, but I guess we have to give the horny ones what they want right? I can’t really say there was anything special in this chapter because there really wasn’t!
3.0 out of 10.0
CHAPTER 3
So they discover some kind of animal… Hmmm… interesting. Actually this scenes is almost another scene where it seems like The Lost World again. For a story about something other than dinosaurs, this is ok!
5.5 out of 10.0
CHAOS THEORY- By Ambrose
Cool approach. I think you got Malcolm’s personality perfect, except for some Ohh and Uhhs. I just have to say though that the story takes off too fast. If you had something really special leading to it it would have been a little more interesting. Dialogue is not too good, I suggest you work with it a little more. It was very entertaining though, and I’m looking forward to some more of it!!
7.0 out of 10.0
1/15/02 11:02:42 PM
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