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Write Chapter 2, I really want to read it!
At 2:46:27 AM on 1/17/2005, Moochos said:
Awesomeness.
I can't wait for Chapter 2!
At 11:11:06 AM on 6/5/2004, Teach said:
Off to an engaging start. Interesting and well-written.
Now, to the bad parts :)
I'm too lazy to research it, but you should probably make sure that his enrollment at Oxford would not be grounds for an education deferment from the military. I know that such things existed during the Vietnam War, but I can't say for certain whether that was the case in 1943. Worth looking into.
Also, there's the matter of the draft notice. No way, no how, would a draft notice ever begin with "we regret to inform you". The U.S. wants you to be proud and honored and all that good stuff.
Other than that, I can find no fault. You're off to a good start here...future installments will be on my reading list.
At 8:52:26 PM on 5/20/2004, Mr.Camel said:
Awesome! I enjoyed it a lot.
I have two suggestions, though. 1- After finishing a paragraph, press enter twice before continuing. This will make it easier to read. 2- The date on the letter is August 17, 1443. You might want fix that.
Awesome story though! I'll read more as soon as I can. =)
At 11:19:17 PM on 5/4/2004, hunter2.0 said:
oh, trust me, it will *wink*. Remember, this is only ch. 1. This isnt a short story. And nice recognizing the Medal of Honor. Most people would call me a poser, but dangit, I like it.
At 4:51:14 PM on 5/4/2004, Brownie69yo said:
nice, i like it, i like the phrase from medal of honor as your header, not sure it fits the story but nice
At 7:58:54 PM on 5/1/2004, hunter2.0 said:
Yeah! This rocks! Michael Crichton can't do better! Whahoo! I have your name because I am god, and I'm not really hunter2, it just appears that way. No, just kidding. Common, let me know if it sucks or not.
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