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WOW!
Nothing more can be said, this story is just plain WOW!
Yeah im off to read the next chapter.
WOW!
~Dark Hunter
At 12:14:50 PM on 4/4/2003, yvonne said:
**Although I cannot wait much longer for "me" to enter into the story and save everyone! ..... That was a typo and well, I was drug induced last night. Damn cold medication.**
Can't wait for MORE, drucifer. I'm still hooked bigtime. Bravo to ya. :)
At 3:12:34 AM on 4/4/2003, yvonne said:
Ditto with what Junkee said. He got here first! ARGH him!
*ahem*
Anywho!
You've managed to get me to like Rick yet again. I hated him, then really hated him, then kind of liked him. Oy. He has grown on me in the last few chapters though, and he works well as the centerpiece for the action. Since he's likable to me now, I care about what happens to him. And I really liked the details that went along with him, as he was sneaking around, trying to get to the fence. A lot of nice details in there to help me visualize everything. Also, the remembrance of John Lee shows his more human side, which ... again ... made him likable to me.
I'm hoping that Grant becomes useful again soon, although he's been great as the comedy element of the story. Who would have thought Grant could be the comedy element of a story? lol.
And you've left us with a "raptors coming toward the building" cliffhanger! ARGH! lol.
Can't wait for me, drucifer. I'm still hooked bigtime. Bravo to ya. :)
At 1:41:08 AM on 4/4/2003, Vader said:
Whew, that was great, I have to agree on everything Junkee said. I loved when Tim wholloped Markinson, and the dino action was very enjoyable (once again).
I honestly think, that although you write in all areas well, that your best talent is writing action. You've done a very good job of keeping my entrhawled with each chapter. Still, all the characterization and dialogue is good too.
At 1:10:35 AM on 4/4/2003, JPJunkee said:
You have a great amount of skill, when it comes to writing action scenes, that much is for certain.
Okay, stuff I liked:
Grant screaming when Cross stabbed the needle into him. . . funny.
Markinson trying to apologize, even though everyone knows he works for Eichmann, and is a total loser.
Rick. Yes, I like Rick. And I like the element of action that he brings to the story.
The fact that Tim punched Markinson. . . GO TIM!
Overall, a great chapter. Still no Malcolm. . . but I hope he'll show up soon.
I anxiously await more!
-- JPJunkee
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