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Yeah, I decided to split the two days up, but originaly it was only one day. I'll have to fix that. Thanks.
At 12:52:35 AM on 6/12/2002, Dino_Dude said:
Pretty good. One problem though, is it just me or was this supposed to be the second day of school?
The way it was written, it seemed it was still the first day.
Mrs Stuart was looking for her husband on the second day of school? Wouldn't she have wondered why he hadn't come home the night of the first day?
And that's the same with Neil's parents ringing Jamie on the second night, what happened to the first night?
And the janitor still cleaning the bathroom on the second day after school, when he was told about it the day before, when he was cleaning the elevator?
I dunno, maybe you just mixed up the days or something. Just confused me a bit, that's all.
Anyway, the death scenes are still quite good!
Cheers!
<i>Dino_Dude</i>
At 9:21:07 PM on 6/10/2002, jp3 girl said:
Can't wait for the next chapter!!
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