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a nice prologue dude
At 8:58:54 PM on 9/7/2003, Mr.Camel said:
Cool!
At 3:26:38 PM on 9/6/2003, Vito_The_White said:
Thanks for the comments guys. In my defense about the introduction... It's to mainly set up for what Lewis Dodgson does throughout this story. It'll hopefully be explained why I took a path dealing with traitors later on... if a small part of it isn't explained in chapter one.
Thanks again for the comments.
At 3:12:54 PM on 9/6/2003, JPJunkee said:
Hmmm. . . Okay, well I’m going to have to say I honestly did not like the intro one bit. You lingered on the whole thing way too long, and like Yvonne said it’s way too personal for a JP story. How could this possibly fit into a JP fanfic? . . . Well, I guess that remains to be seen, but as it is now, that intro sticks in my mind as a poorly conspired and produced addition to the story.
The prologue was another matter all together. The death of Juan and the way it was put together flowed nicely. . . . Nice and violent.
One line I don’t quite get; ‘Apparently these 'Monsters' were warm blooded. But that sure as hell didn't explain their ugly features.’ . . . . .Why would that explain its ugly features?. . . That doesn’t really make any sense.
‘This is it,’ Juan thought to himself. "Damn you Biosyn!" LOL. . . .hehe, if that line was supposed to be funny, then bravo, otherwise. . . .ehhh
Anyway, it was written fairly well and its interesting enough, so I’ll try to make time to read future chapters.
-- JPJunkee
At 2:56:46 PM on 9/6/2003, Dino-dave said:
Beautiful. I kneew Juan was gonna die. I loved the way you made it really chilling by dragging out his demise. I also like the idea of introducing Nessy to the JP folklore. Keep up the cool work!!
At 10:58:21 PM on 9/5/2003, Vito_The_White said:
Hey Aragorn o_O Long time no see... I haven't finished Jurassic Congo. I don't even know when I will. I'm having writers block with that bloody thing. If you'd like you could help me with the thing o_O
At 10:49:28 PM on 9/5/2003, yvonne said:
I liked the premise so far, Vito. The intro seemed to be a little too personal for a Jurassic Park story, but the prologue was interesting to read. I'll make a point to check out the next part when it's posted. :)
At 9:58:49 PM on 9/5/2003, Aragorn said:
Whatever happened to posting the rest of Jurassic Congo on FF.Net?
At 7:12:03 PM on 9/4/2003, Vito_The_White said:
Thanks Crisco:) I'm glad ya liked it. I'll have chapter one out pretty soon.
At 3:05:21 PM on 9/4/2003, Crisco said:
that was pretty cool, looking forward to your next post
At 7:43:35 PM on 9/2/2003, SpinoMonkey said:
It was great, I hope you keep up the good work. :)
~SpinoMonkey~
At 7:39:52 PM on 9/2/2003, Vito_The_White said:
Yeah, I saw that one.... as well as a couple of others... Umm... I really hope that you don't stop reading it just because of silly grammer mistakes that my Word program didn't catch... What did you think of the actual story? The intro and prologue itself, besides those errors.
At 7:36:52 PM on 9/2/2003, SpinoMonkey said:
here is one ---> filed <--- I think you were trying to say filled. You may of said real words...but not the one's you ment! I'd read over it and see what else you can find! :)
~SpinoMonkey~
At 7:13:54 PM on 9/2/2003, Vito_The_White said:
Umm... I have a spellcheck on Microsoft Word dude o_O It didn't tell me that any of it was spelled wrong... Please elaborte on what's spelled wrong, because I'm a bit confused there.
At 6:50:57 PM on 9/2/2003, SpinoMonkey said:
read it. (sorry stupid post button...forget what I said about "Ready")
At 6:49:38 PM on 9/2/2003, SpinoMonkey said:
Hmm...well you need to spell check...It seems to drag some things...The spelling problem makes me want to not read it...I'll give it one more read when the first chapter comes out but if it's not any better then I'm not going to ready .
~SpinoMonkey~
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