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I actually like Sim -- sounds like one of my better profs. And, for the record, I've rarely *not* been let out early the first class in any given course. But maybe we Canadians are slackers.
Well-written as usualy. One little factual error I noticed: it's clear that your class was let out after maybe five minutes, but on your way out, you say to Erin: “I’ve got to get to my next class. I’ll see you later.” Unless you were lying, or your classes are *really* short, this doesn't really make sense.
Sorry to be critical -- speaking as a writer, though, I know that criticism is more valuable than encouragement, at least if you would like to become a great writer.
-The Host
At 11:32:23 PM on 12/25/2002, JPJunkee said:
'But nothing could prepare me for what I was about to see . . .'
What do you see?!?!? Tell me now!!! I must know!!!
. . . . sorry, I just get a little too involved in the better stories. I kinda get sucked in and. . . well, you get the picture.
Anyway! GREAT work once again, Vader, and I look forward to reading more. Oh, and I have now officially decided not to like this Sim person.
-- JPJunkee
At 11:55:24 AM on 12/24/2002, yvonne said:
Ahhh, it ends with a cliffhanger! Great stuff so far, Vader. And now the whole "Personal Growth" thing is coming back to haunt you. :)
What kind of name is Sim, anyway? lol. Sounds like kind of a weirdo, but he probably ended up being the best instructor there. hehe
Looking forward to more.
At 4:42:05 AM on 12/24/2002, Chavez said:
superb
At 11:07:46 PM on 12/23/2002, RaptorVinny500 said:
Excellent Vader!
At 10:36:21 PM on 12/23/2002, Rick Arnold said:
Very nice Vader. A good chapter, can't wait for more.
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