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Wow, what an amazing expression of emotion! I follow comments that others have already said, this has left some depressed feelings inside me. And I know, I haven't had the chance to read this story in its entirety, but from what I've read, your life seems a very complicated one, yet interesting to the outside eye. I'll move on to the next chapter as soon as I possible can.
Oh, and did I forget to mention this is excellent work? ;)
Cheers,
Dino_Dude
At 5:01:30 AM on 2/15/2003, RaptorSlash said:
That was a brilliant story, you are a true writer. But I thought the stories had to be about dinos? didn't it? anyway your story was pretty sad(as in upsetting). Keep up the good work!
Raptor Slash
At 8:45:56 PM on 2/14/2003, Chavez said:
great writings. I bet the next chapter is going to be good too.
At 6:08:38 PM on 2/14/2003, Spinoboy11 said:
Truly emotional chapter, man. You always write in great detail, and this chapter is no
exception.
Keep up the great writing!
-Spinoboy11
-Signature Designer
At 12:16:03 AM on 2/14/2003, JPJunkee said:
Damn, I love this story I really do, but after every chapter, I'm left feeling depressed. . . . is that wrong? Hell, it probably is. But it's nothing to do with you. Because well. . . . the fact that you could actually make me feel depressed should be taken as a compliment, because not much literature makes me feel depressed. . . and I read lots of depressing crap.
Anyway, about the chapter: I'm sorry to see the departure from Luke, I hope to see him in future chapters, he was a cool guy. And your talk with your father was very emotional, and very well written. And though it pains me to say it (honestly it does), the mentioning of your sister seemed out of place. Now, I understand that this is all based on a true story -- your story -- but the fact that the reader never even knew you had a sister (at least I didn't, perhaps I missed something) kinda leaves the reader wondering. . . . you see, as a true story, that part was told well. But as a work of literature, it could have been built up better in previous chapters. Just my opinion. And the reason it pains me to say that, was because of the fact that it was probably a very traumatic time for you, and for that I am deeply sorry.
Anyway, great job, yet again! I look forward to the next chapter.
-- JPJunkee
At 8:20:05 PM on 2/13/2003, yvonne said:
Another very emotionally stirring chapter, Vader. I almost feel like I'm prying into your life, reading about you, your father, and sister. I truly hope that whatever might have gone wrong there, can be resolved in the future.
And to top off the good storytelling, is a finely written piece of work, as well.
Excellent, as always. :)
At 7:21:06 PM on 2/13/2003, Majestic-1 said:
You're too depressed. You need pills.
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