|
|
[ Log In ] [ Register ]
 means the user is online now!
Well. . . the second time reading the opening scene. . . and I still like it. The action is intense and powerful. And from the get go, you really get to see how Davies' character reacts to such situations. It's great stuff.
I also liked the insightful commentary you added to the story.
It's all good! :)
-- JPJunkee
At 4:43:48 AM on 4/14/2003, drucifer67 said:
As a sci-fi fan from way back, I have written literally hundreds of space battles, but none that I liked.
This is what I was striving for.
The descriptions here are excellent, as is the tension created by Davies' nervousness (exemplified both in dialogue and in details--nothing says nervous like the trusty "bead of sweat".
I must admit, I've set this story aside quite a few times, as I have a difficult time becoming engrossed in works done in this format. However, screenplay form or not, I have sampled enough of this work in the past weeks to know that it's going to be quite a read.
My schedule is hell, but I'll make time for this one.
At 3:00:42 AM on 4/14/2003, dark hunter said:
Very nice, i enjoy reading this more the second time through.
The whole space battle is amazing, especially your descriptions of the manouveres of Davies ship.
I love this story.
~Dark Hunter
At 10:16:56 PM on 4/12/2003, The Host said:
Thanks for the comment, Vader! Hope you enjoy reading the rest.
-The Host
At 1:00:24 AM on 4/12/2003, Vader said:
Fantastic work on the opening sequence. Very tense, tight. I felt like I was riding along with the characters the entire time. I could perfectly visualize everything.
Will read more tomorrow morning, a bit tired now. :)
Sorry, you must be logged in to post a comment
|
|
Add DJP3P to your newsreader!
|
