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Junkee i agree wholeheartedly with your first and second post!
~Dark Hunter
At 5:14:48 AM on 3/12/2003, dark hunter said:
*Dark Hunter sits at his computer stunned. Lost for words, tears appear at the corner of his eyes, which he blinks back. Staring at the screen he cannot fathom what has just happened, the end of an empire, the end of Triumvirate*
*****
Wow. I cannot express how much this story has proven to be the best i have read on this site. I am quite serious when i say, take this story to a publisher and get it published so i can keep a copy of it on my bookshelf forever. This story is just amazing.
Davies decision at the end had me stunned, even i didn't think he'd go that far, but once you're in, it's hard to get out. I must say the character of Davies is incredible, so simple so darn complex.
He has his issues and dilemmas just as we all do, yet his are amplified a hundred fold and well lets just say im glad i am not him.
Macy was great, the hardnosed veteran, i liked macy, though in some way i didn't trust him, however he turned out to be good, I applaud his character. though i can't help but wonder, did he realise what jack did at the end?
Johnson. NOOOOOOOOOOOOOO! one of my favourite characters dies in the last chapter. Something no-one would expect. Bang, he's dead. Nothing more, no huge death scene, no attcking Davies back, it was a scene that was incredibly accurate, i love it.
*I forgot to mention this last chapter but the elevator chase scene thing was incredible a highly memorable scene.
*****
The action is superb and extremely well written, with every minute detail meaning something.
Davies struggle with himself and Dawson was amazing, i could picture the whole thing, the whole last scene in my mind perfectly im saying i could see every tiny detail unfolding before my eyes, i applaud a master in writing.
Finally the plot. It all made sense, Dawson, Copley and the CEO were in on it togther, what a shock and aliens did exist, my god, what an amazing revolution. I cannot believe that this story is finally over.
*****
Last of all i want to thank you, for the many hours of fantastic reading you have given me, if i knew you personally i would give you a hug, cause this story has impacted greatly on me.
Thank-you
Rating: 10/10
~Dark Hunter
At 3:21:03 PM on 1/4/2003, JPJunkee said:
Well, a day later, I read my comments on this installment. And. . . . I realized that they could be considered by some to be a bit far-fetched. Well, I was tired, and I do love this story, so I kinda got carried away. This is not to say, that I don't think that this script can't go anywhere (cuz, I think it could), but I just don't wish to sound too. . . . ah hell, I don't even know the word! Well, I think I kinda made myself clear though. Or atleast I hope.
And I realized, that I didn't really comment on how the story ended, I just said, that it was great. So, let me say a little bit more on that.
The part with Davies killing Johnson was both sad, and surprising. I hated to see it happen, becuase I liked Johnson. But then again, I think it was probably one of the best parts of the script, because from a film's point of view, that was a great scene.
Then, I really liked how Dawson ended up being a possible bad guy, and how the CEO was actually in a sense the true hero. Good twist there! And the best thing, it all made sense!
Then the ending with Hawk speaking with Jack, was nothing short of superb. Awesome scene.
In short, I think the ending installment was the best installment of the entire story.
Overall story grade: 10 out of 10 stars.
-- JPJunkee
At 1:54:07 AM on 1/4/2003, JPJunkee said:
Honestly, I'm lost for words.
One part of me is so amazed and is smiling with great delight to a wonderful ending to a wonderful story.
While the other part of me is very upset that the story ended.
Honestly, I hold this as probably the BEST original fic this site has ever had. And now, it's over!
Can I anticipate a sequel? A prequel? Something else? I need more! I need more!
But, in a way, this is really all a person could want from a sci-fi story.
You have created art, you have created such a major entertainment, that I'm actually looking forward to seeing this in theaters. Isn't that a great feeling as an author?
I applaud you, Host. And I hope that someday, everyone will be able to view your incredible tale, and I honestly think that someday, they will.
I mean imagine it, one day someone could be asking, "What's your favorite science fiction film?" And I'd be saying TRIUMVIRATE, and I'd have the privilege to say that I knew Triumvirate's creator, way back when. . . .
Wow, I know I ramble, but this is almost too much. So, I'm going to stop now, and I'm going to wish you luck with this script and any of your other projects.
You have what it takes.
-- JPJunkee
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