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Another fantastic chapter/installment Host.
This story is just incredible, the dialogue is amazingly realistic and smooth flowing, not jumpy like a number of conversations between characters in other stories.
The conversation between Jack and Dawson and Dawson and the President were beautifully done and planned, then written with precision, making them awesome pieces of work.
The detail is fantastic and the scene with the couple walking, going up the elevator and what not was so well written i could see exactly what it would have looked like.
And Jack keeps changing, itis incredible, i can't believe how cool this story keeps getting, it continues to surpass all expectations.
Rating: 91/2 / 10
~Dark Hunter
At 8:56:36 PM on 12/8/2002, The Host said:
Thanks! I'll keep an eye out for that when I'm reediting. If you find any other errors in the future, I'd appreciate it if you could continue to point 'em out. I want to make this as good as I can!
Thanks,
The Host
At 8:45:51 PM on 12/8/2002, JPJunkee said:
Very interesting installment, Host.
I really liked the conversation between Dawson and the president. . . . . the president is still an odd man if you ask me.
There were a few mistakes I saw here and there, where letters were left out (though this might have been because it was a script, but for some reason I doubt it), and there were some sentences that kinda ended wrong (but once again, that's probably just me).
GREAT job though, and I'm looking forward to more.
-- JPJunkee
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