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It was a little difficult to tie in the whole 'shaving-cream can to Dodgson' thing, so I kinda slapped it all together quickly. Since this was my experimental fan-fic, it is a little, uh, unadvanced. But I personally think that it picks up later on. Thanks a lot, guys, and you're absolutely right!
At 7:42:48 PM on 8/27/2003, Vito_The_White said:
I agree completely with JPJunkee. The writing is perfect, but like he said, the whole story with the shaving cream can should've been pursued a lot differently, like the idea that I gave you before you reposted this.
At 1:41:26 PM on 8/27/2003, JPJunkee said:
Okay, I have read this all before, but I don’t remember any of it so I decided to read it again.
I don’t like the stuff about the shaving cream can, it’s too unbelievable. A kids finds a nasty shaving cream can, and the dad tells him to put it in the cooler? No, no, no, no. . . . That’s pushing it just a little bit, there. That dad must have a few screws loose in his head to tell his son to place the can in the cooler. And yet, it seems the story is all based on the grounds that the shaving cream can had found its way into the hands of Dodgson. The writing’s fine, but the story is a little questionable right now. . . . I know I have read this before, and my comments were probably more of praise before, but now I think I’m more aware of things that are going on in the story, or whatever. Anyway, I’ll read more as you post it. . .
-- JPJunkee
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