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means the user is online now! At 7:03:08 AM on 8/28/2003, Stryderman said: ... too true, too true. The only thing I can say in defense is: I wrote this two years ago, at the age of 11, and it was my first fan-fic. Thanks for taking the time to read it!
At 7:49:26 PM on 8/27/2003, Vito_The_White said: Things are going a bit too fast now dude. You've got this team of mercenaries together a little too quickly and you seem to be rushing all of the dialogue leaving little to no suspense. You really should consider slowing all of this down and giving the characters some time to develop so the reader will know what he is reading and what the characters are truly about.
At 4:41:06 AM on 8/27/2003, Stryderman said: Thanks Edgar! Glad to see you've begun reading this.
At 2:10:56 PM on 8/26/2003, Edgar said: cool :)
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