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I'm really enjoying this series!
At 9:53:19 PM on 1/23/2003, Strider_Aragorn said:
dang it, i cant bump in this stupid thing. dang it
At 4:19:56 AM on 1/23/2003, Strider_Aragorn said:
Believe me, most of the extra characters, you don't need to give a smeg about ... just the good guys (and only some of them, like Jack and Thorne)
At 10:26:16 PM on 1/22/2003, Vito_The_White said:
Very interesting. John Hammond was well done, and I believe you're doing ok with Lewis Dodgson as well. However, the other characters didn't seem to catch my attention. I found it rather boring to read about them. I didn't really get a chance to get to know them, or get into their minds. However, you're still doing ok. I look forward to the next chapter.
At 9:59:37 PM on 1/22/2003, Strider_Aragorn said:
Thanks guys, more positives :)
It's all happening really fast ...
JPJunkee: What you said aobut the forced dialogue is probably true , i can't write dialogue for nuts. I just like the action scenes - the ones coming up soon!
At 6:10:56 PM on 1/22/2003, Vader said:
Hey, I just finished reading. Nice work non the dialogue, Hammond's was very true to character. Keep up the ogood work!
At 3:43:26 PM on 1/22/2003, yvonne said:
A very good chapter. Good guys and bad guys are now all, officially traveling towards doom. :)
Can't wait til they all get there!
At 11:01:18 AM on 1/22/2003, JPJunkee said:
Very good work, Strider. I enjoyed every last bit of it.
I liked how you wrote Hammond, you really hit him dead on. But, some of the other characters dialogue felt a little bit forced and unrealistic. But, that's only a small problem.
Overall, it was quite good. Keep it up!
-- JPJunkee
At 5:17:38 AM on 1/22/2003, Strider_Aragorn said:
Thanks man, I've tried to keep Hammond to his movie self. Just like you did with Malcolm in X-Factor. Speaking of which, when'll chapter 12 come out?
At 1:50:10 AM on 1/22/2003, drucifer67 said:
And things begin to move...
Still going strong. Nice work, as usual...this is getting interesting :)
I like the way you wrote Hammond's dialogue. The whole "Yes, yes, of course" thing is so Hammond...
You've drawn me into the story, and now you're keeping me interested...keep up the good work, man...!
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