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means the user is online now! At 10:53:51 AM on 7/7/2003, dark hunter said: Funky man.
That was awesome, i really felt for Mark and Andria it was very well written and the description was flawless.
I really rooted for Mark to kick the crap through Hampton at the first encounter, hopefully he'll do it at the second.
Keep this up man.
The flashback was also a very nice touch, adding another dimension to this great story.
Rating: 8.5/10
~Dark Hunter
At 11:18:50 PM on 5/1/2003, JPJunkee said: Very good. I enjoyed this chapter a lot. The confrontation between Mark and Hampton was written very well, as was the feelings inside Mark throughout the whole chapter. The dialogue was written well, for the most part. Except for the one line; “If you think that’s surprising…” . . . I just felt that was corny, and ultimately, not needed. The story is moving along very fast (almost too fast in some respects), and I'm anxious to find out what happens next.
Overall, this was a great chapter. I look forward to more.
-- JPJunkee
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