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means the user is online now! At 10:47:08 AM on 7/7/2003, dark hunter said: Very nicely written.
The development of characters was very nice especially Jon, Andria was okay but the way you described Mark seeing her (an angel..) was a little cheesy, still it was good.
The writing is quite good and very nicely done.
Rating: 8/10
~Dark Hunter
At 12:54:58 AM on 4/29/2003, JPJunkee said: Another good chapter. Nicely written. I like the characters of Jon and Andria, they both seem like they will be interesting to read about. If there's one thing I didn't like, it was the end. It all felt too rushed, and a bit goofy even. I understand that Mark doesn't want to bring Andria into the whole mess. . . and that's all well and good. But, it just came to that part too swiftly. It needed more build up. Because the way it is now, it just felt kinda corny.
-- JPJunkee
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