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At 1:28:18 AM on 1/6/2002, John D. said:
I agree with the others...its starting off good but you need to slow down since you have dialogue in it. I myself have strong feelings for description in writing so show more of it and the story would be even better. AlanGrant5 did and I found his stories great...
At 9:24:05 PM on 1/5/2002, AlanGrant5 said:
I like that you have Alan and Malcolm back together. To put them back in a situation such as this, is like the ODD COUPLE stranded on a dino-infested island. I would like to see Alan and Malcolm's chemistry again.
At 9:22:25 PM on 1/5/2002, AlanGrant5 said:
No, other than that your doing great.
At 9:06:19 PM on 1/5/2002, Rexjaws said:
Any more comments?
At 9:02:34 PM on 1/5/2002, Rexjaws said:
OK, I will take your advise. I will work on it, and re-release it at a later date, thanks for the comments, Any more?
At 8:53:48 PM on 1/5/2002, AlanGrant5 said:
This could turn out well, but I agree with Vito; you should slow down a bit. I think you should take your time with this one by putting a lot of hard work into it... dialogue, grammar, descriptions. This could turn out to be a great fan-fic. The premise sounds good, just don't rush it too much. :)
At 8:15:28 PM on 1/5/2002, Rexjaws said:
Yes, I know I have to slow down a bit. But it hasn't been my way, Tomrrow I will be posting the Second chapter.
At 7:19:43 PM on 1/5/2002, Vito Hardy said:
This is a very good story but you're going to fast man. bring both grant and malcolm back for the fourth instalment is a great idea and i did that for my jp4 story as well. The only thing you need to do is slow down.
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