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means the user is online now! At 11:17:49 AM on 10/18/2005, dark hunter said: Slightly confusing in the middle section where the perspective shifts to present tense ("have" rather than "had"). It made it a little annoying as before and after this section it shifts to past tense...
Other than that a good prologue. The writing is above average with an obvious amount of detail having gone into the structure and sentencing. The detail of the story too is very nice, really lets you see what's happening.
Good start.
~K
At 10:47:30 AM on 10/12/2005, ELSIE said: Good so far...
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