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more like a D- ;)
~Dark Hunter
PS, like i said, don't take this harshly, try to use these points to help develop your story, after making some changes, repost it, see what people think, then if more changes are needed do them, then post again, or else once you've written some, just email it to someone to look over and give an unbiased honest view of the story, that'll help you write better, if you would like i'll do it for you.
At 6:49:34 PM on 5/16/2003, RaptorClaw said:
Gah, that's like, an F
At 7:46:06 AM on 5/16/2003, dark hunter said:
I found this to be a bit rushed. it all seemed to happen rather too quickly, and without any real character development, the Pteranodon scene was good, but could have been played out longer, and the other scenes really went way to quickly.
You must remember this is constructive critisism and no bagging me will take place ;)
Rating: 4.5/10
At 1:50:50 PM on 5/10/2003, RaptorClaw said:
Post pleez
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