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Fine development, and just enough of the little things that makes stories good. Reluctant to say Great, but still Very Good!
At 8:17:24 AM on 5/5/2002, dark hunter said:
very very cool chapter Parasaur w. That kangecko was cool, man what a strange creature, for once when people think of strange creatures they think of two totally different animals and join them, very well done, not just thought up on the spot.
Mac and Doug are both great characters whom you've obviously put a lot of time and effort into developing them further, great work
That humanoid alien at the end was really freaky man, scary if you will, the way it didn't flinch just took the humans under its arm was very well done.
Can't wait for next chapter.
~Dark Hunter
At 1:13:19 AM on 5/5/2002, Parasaur.w said:
Thank you both! I'm glad you liked it! :)
At 11:33:19 PM on 5/4/2002, Vader said:
Just as good as the first chapter! As Yvonne said, fantastic character development - thats something rare in fan-fics these days. :) I look forward to the next chapter . . . :D
<i>-Vader
Moderator and Writer of Dan's Page
<a href="http://dansjp3page.com/fanfic/Vader-SITE_WARS__Episode_V_-_Attack_of_the_Hunters_(Part_1).asp"><font color=Orange>Attack of the Hunters - REVISED INTO NOVEL (Part 1)</a>
<a href="http://dansjp3page.com/fanfic/Vader-SITE_WARS__Episode_V_-_Attack_of_the_Hunters_(Part_2).asp"><font color=Orange>Attack of the Hunters - REVISED INTO NOVEL (Part 2)</i></a></font>
At 7:53:27 PM on 5/4/2002, yvonne said:
Wow. Very good. :)
I was laughing to myself, when Mac and Doug thought that kangaroo/gecko creature harmless. People are always making those mistakes, and Mac paid for that mistake with his broken nose. :)
Good character development, with both Mac and Doug. I'm glad you're introducing everyone slowly. That way I can try and keep everyone straight in my head.
And that strange humanoid at the end was creepy. And it can speak English, too. That was a nice twist.
At 5:17:25 PM on 5/4/2002, np said:
Oh, I see...
At 5:07:57 PM on 5/4/2002, Parasaur.w said:
Well, np, that is part of the mystery they must solve. Why is Earth like that? Who changed it? Your question is to be answered in later chapters. One thing I strived for when writing this was to keep readers guessing.
At 4:59:11 PM on 5/4/2002, np said:
Pretty good, but If I were you I would say that te humans were genetically altered in the past for some good reason, cause' nothing could change that radically that soon.
At 3:23:35 PM on 5/4/2002, Parasaur.w said:
Thank you Neo ;)
At 3:00:17 PM on 5/4/2002, Neo-the1 said:
Great job again.
I think we should tally the good writers on this page from a 6 to a 7.
<i>However bright the light, the shadows are deeper- ~NeO~</i>
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