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not bad i liked it a lil more detail would have been nice but otherwise it was real good
At 3:39:05 PM on 5/7/2003, MartinRandle said:
Yes I agree, I liked the start but it sort of ran out of steam.
Assuming Muldoon survived along with harding and others, you have enough material to write a whole story.
EG: the rex was in the vicinity having just left the visitors centre and he could have out witted it by hiding inside the raptor cage, before even getting back to the relative safety of the visitors centre.
The 3 raptors were dead. 2 by the rex and one frozen in to a popsicle. Where did the 4th come from?
At 10:08:11 PM on 5/6/2003, MuldoonLives15 said:
Thanks Jango, I appreciate it.
At 9:02:30 PM on 5/6/2003, jango raptor said:
Enjoyable, but unlikely. No, Im afraid poor Muldoon was killed. You practically see him being devoured. But its a cool story.
P.S. Harding leaves on the boat. You should have continued on about how Muldoon lived on the island for weeks, alone. Using the food in the visitor's center, andhaving to survive against the Rex, Baryonyx, Herrarasaurus(sp?), and Dilo's. Good story nonetheless, but that would've been more interesting.
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