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Unfortunately, I have to agree with Rick on some points. As I mentioned earlier, you need more character development.
I recognised some of the action figure names, but I understand that this is something original, that you didnt just want to have some story that someone else had already made up
I look forward to reviewing it.
At 9:14:44 PM on 7/12/2003, Rick Arnold said:
Yea.... well... first off, if you are going to do a story based on the action figure line, it might actually do good to stick to the actual story. Like cutting out 'Jaws' Jackson, and the fact that the Dino Trackers were inGen employees and the Evil Raiders (emphasis on the Evil part), are poachers. But aside from those trivial points of trivia, it still wasn't that good. It's hardly a story, more like just throwing a bunch of characters into a location and having people die. Where's the character development? The only character that is developed almost fully is Turner, and then the only other characters that come close are Dr. Snare and Harrison. The story also seems to be really.... really rushed....
Overall I give it a 1/5. I give it a 1 simply because of the shred of creativity in using the Dino Tracker/Evil Raider lines, I just wish a more capable author had tackled the story, making it more enjoyable to read.
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