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Thanks for the comments, jmock5 and Dark Hunter!
As for how Grant and Malcolm would have acted when attacked. . . . I don't know, I just wrote it the way I pictured it happening. But perhaps it would have happened differently, like you said. And as for it having good morals. . . . cool! I never even thought about that. lol
-- JPJunkee
At 4:35:28 AM on 3/1/2003, dark hunter said:
wow. loved the carchar attack, very well done but i reckon grant or malcolm would have behaved differently, perhaps one of them would have just gone into a state of shock, once again being attacked by animals that had attacked them previously? who knows.
well written with good morals, surprising that a JP novel can have good morals (i mean that in the sense of a fan fic ;))
8/10
~Dark Hunter
At 4:25:32 PM on 2/14/2003, jmock5 said:
Very, very interesting. I love the story so far. You are doing a great job of making original ideas. Looking forward to reading more.
At 7:50:24 PM on 2/3/2003, JPJunkee said:
Thanks for the comment, Dino_Dude! I'm happy to see that you've continued the story!
And btw, Malcolm's reasons for coming along will be told, and very soon I do believe.
-- JPJunkee
At 2:32:54 AM on 2/3/2003, Dino_Dude said:
Well Junkee, I have finally found time to read the next 'stage' of your story. This has totally refreshed my memory, and now I'm right back into this great story! I like how things are coming along, and Malcolm's ramblings were a big plus, they certainly help to develop him, though I still anticipate hearing his reasons for coming on the trip.
Wu's story is also coming along very nicely. The deformed raptors are a great and original idea. They are killing machines, yet you can't help but feel sorry for these ones.
All up, a great Stage in the story! Now that I've found time for this, I'll really try and get further on, and eventually catch up! ;)
Cheers,
~Dino_Dude~
At 11:18:07 AM on 1/5/2003, JPJunkee said:
Thanks for the comments, Vito and Yvonne! :)
The Malcolm ramble was something I had fun writing, since I really enjoy the character of Malcolm. You'll be seeing more of his rambling later on as well. :)
And as for Vito thinking that Leah reminds him of Gale Weathers: I find it really quite shocking, that Leah could remind you of her, but that's only because I've never seen Scream. But, I'm glad Leah reminds you of somebody! hehe
Look forward to hearing your comments on future installments.
-- JPJunkee
At 11:41:35 AM on 1/4/2003, Vito_The_White said:
You've done it again man. Wow. I loved what Biosyn did with the expirementing on the raptors. I could just picture all of that, as well as the whole story, being in a movie version. I felt really bad for those raptors, which it's always hard to feel bad for a Velociraptor, because of the killings in the other three movies. However, you were able to make me feel pitty for these raptors.
Just like Yvonne, I'm also injoying the news characters. Leah reminds me of Gale Weathers from the Scream movies. She's my favorite character of those, so that's deffinately a plus for you man.
This was all very exciting. I wish I could go ahead and read the next part right now, but I'd be honored to wait for the next part in this great story:)
At 3:34:09 AM on 1/4/2003, yvonne said:
I'm really enjoying this story. :) Here are a few random thoughts:
Awesome, awesome Malcolm ramble there. It sounds exactly like something he would say.
I love how Chapter 14 ends. The inner thoughts of Wu, regretting everything, right down to even being born, is great and wonderfully descriptive. Good job.
I like the new characters, too. Leah and Aaron (the camera guy).
All in all, I really like what I've read so far, and can't wait to read more. :)
At 2:26:44 AM on 1/4/2003, JPJunkee said:
Thanks for the comment, Vader. I'm glad you're enjoying the story.
And I honestly don't know what you could get out of two sentences, Neelis, but thanks for reading them and commenting on them!
:)
-- JPJunkee
At 1:58:23 PM on 1/2/2003, Neelis said:
I read two sentences or so: man, this is good stuff! Keep it up like that!
At 1:27:50 AM on 1/2/2003, Vader said:
You handle the seperate stories of the different groups of characters well. You do a great job of getting inside Wu's head (I feel like I'm witnissing everything from his point of view).
I look forward to more, keep it up. :)
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