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ooooooh Dr. Grants in looove!
hehe.
About time Grant found another love other then Ellie ;) I like it a lot.
Your description of the battle between the raptors was well done though a bit sketchy in places, i liked it.
The carnotaur attack on Benny was quite shocking i thought, the drool is a good addition as we have no idea what these dinos were like and your idea is great.
~8/10
~Dark Hunter
At 3:46:57 AM on 2/15/2003, jmock5 said:
Can't stop reading. This stage was possibly the best. I liked the Carnataur drool thing. And you really can portray the blood and gore very well.
I'll keep reading.
Gotta wait for tomorrow though.
At 10:11:26 PM on 1/30/2003, JPJunkee said:
Thanks for the comments, everyone! They're really appreciated, and I'm extremely happy to see that people are enjoying the story.
Vito: In a way, I can see what you're talking about with Dodgson. I did not intend to make him just a mindless killer. The reason why he killed Mac the computer guy, is because not only was Mac going to kill Dodgson. But, Dodgson basically knows that he himself is dying, and he might as well take everyone with him. I hope this might clear some of that up, and I do appreciate your views on that particular scene. But I thought I'd say what I had intended for that scene to represent.
Anyway, thanks a lot everyone!
-- JPJunkee
At 6:38:40 PM on 1/30/2003, Vito_The_White said:
Well, I was finally able to read this. I loved it just like the other parts man. It's all good.
I really enjoyed the stand off with the humans and raptors. It was like an old western movie:) Anyway, it was just great. You really know how to put gun fighting scenes into a JP fan fic.
I really didn't like what Dodgson did to his computer programmer. I didn't think that Dodgson could stoop so low. He's became like a horror killer now or something. He might as well put on a Ghost Face costume from the scream movies and starts slashing everyone. However, it does work for the feel of the story. I'll give ya that.
Grant, Malcolm, and Wu are still doing pretty good. I'm glad for that. Too bad about Special Agent Brunell though. Looks like he doesn't even need Hannibal Lecter to get his death to occur;)
Well, this was again a great part, and I can't wait to read the next stage!
At 2:36:46 AM on 1/29/2003, yvonne said:
Good stuff, JPJunkee. :)
Finding out that Brunell was FBI really threw me for a loop. For some reason, when I first read this, I didn't think about him lying to anyone about what he might have for a profession. You got me. :)
Dodgson. I'm glad he got hurt. What a jackass. And the way he killed Mac in cold blood like that was eerie.
The way you explained how the badly cloned dinos looked was very gross ... and cool. You had quite a few really good descriptions in this stage that pretty much made me sick. Good job. lol.
And now for my favorite part. It seems that Grant may have found someone compatible with him finally. I'm loving the little conversations that they're having, here and in the last stage. Great job.
Overall, a great stage. :)
At 2:01:49 AM on 1/29/2003, Vader said:
Nice work on the dialogue. I really enjoyed this installment. :D
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