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Well I never finished reading this, so I'm getting around to it now, and starting from teh beginning again, to refresh my mind on what happens. I still stick by my earlier comments.
At 6:12:26 PM on 4/2/2003, Dinonut said:
truley great! unbeilevable
~Dinonut
The One. The Only. Dinonut
"I'm back, da na da na na na"
At 1:53:10 PM on 2/22/2003, JPJunkee said:
Thanks for the comments, Aragorn and jmock5!
-- JPJunkee
At 10:08:46 AM on 2/22/2003, Aragorn said:
I told you once it was completed then I'd get around to reading it, and so far its been really good! The intro was excellent with a creepy forshadowing at what will happen, and the prolouge was done very well, as well. I'm off to read the other chapters now!
At 9:17:07 PM on 2/13/2003, jmock5 said:
Awesome, I loved it. Reading this really late, but oh well, still the same story. Gonna go read the first chapters now.
At 10:06:21 PM on 1/25/2003, JPJunkee said:
Thanks for the comment, drucifer. I'm happy to see you've decided to try out the story!
:)
-- JPJunkee
At 1:21:06 PM on 1/23/2003, drucifer67 said:
I like what you've done here...Dodgson is a snake, and Wu is a jellyfish. Very interesting...and the meandering melancholy of the intro creates a feeling of impending doom, which is a nice way of making the reader curious. The dialogue is believable and nicely succinct. I think I'm gonna go read more.
At 12:08:37 AM on 1/23/2003, JPJunkee said:
I like it when new readers show up "late", it gives me something to look forward to. lol
Thanks for the comment, Strider_Aragorn.
-- JPJunkee
At 5:24:54 AM on 1/22/2003, Strider_Aragorn said:
Also another Aussie here ... and also a bit late. Still, I really enjoyed this, and it looks like it's heading towards what I am in my fan-fic ...
At 11:22:21 PM on 1/7/2003, JPJunkee said:
Thanks for the comments Vito. I like it when new readers begin the story later on, it gives me something to look forward to.
And as odd as it may seem, the Introduction was not planned out at all. In fact, I had already finished writing the entire story, when I decided to write an Intro. So, one day when I was angry at the world, I sat down and wrote.
Considering the extreme lack of sleep I had at the time, I'm quite pleased at how it turned out.
Thanks again for reading and commenting, and I hope you like the future installments.
-- JPJunkee
At 10:09:27 AM on 1/4/2003, Vito_The_White said:
Well, for just starting to read this, very late on, I can see that it is going to be a very interesting story for me to get into. I really enjoyed your introduction. It seemed very well planned and thought out.
The Prologue was good as well. Even though Dr. Wu is one of my favorite characters and I hated to really find out that he's a traitor to InGen. However, good job man. I'm going to read the next part right now.
At 2:50:22 PM on 12/8/2002, JPJunkee said:
Thanks for the (very detailed) comment, Host. I appreciate your view on how it could have been better in multiple ways. I do not take offense to what you said, instead I think it will help me grow as an author.
I too felt that I repeated myself a few times during on a few occasions, but I wanted to make sure I got my point across. Maybe I over did it, but oh well.
I'm glad you liked what you've read so far. And I'm looking forward to reading you comments on future installments.
-- JPJunkee
At 3:29:15 AM on 12/8/2002, The Host said:
Incidentally, rereading my comments, they sound a bit harsher than I intended. Honestly, this was really really really good. I just like to focus on criticism, especially for the better stories I read, as I feel that's the best way to help writers develop.
Congratulations, once again, on a job well done.
-H
At 3:27:18 AM on 12/8/2002, The Host said:
Took me a while to get around to this. But I'm pretty impressed. There were a couple of misspelled words and instances of incorrect grammar usage, and several sentence fragments. Nothing too distracting, though. I also felt that the first half of your prologue was unnecessarily long -- you seemed to make a few of your points several times. But, taken altogether, the prologue was quite eloquent and surprisingly profound. The introduction, too, was well written. A bit more description might have been nice. But you were able to adequately set a tone through action and dialogue, and you proved particularly adept at establishing character in only a few short paragraphs. Again, on the whole, this is one of the better fanfics (so far) that I've read on this site. I look forward to reading more. (But not tonight. I've got an essay to finish!)
-The Host
At 1:37:15 PM on 12/2/2002, JPJunkee said:
Thanks Seth.
-- JPJunkee
At 1:03:25 AM on 12/2/2002, Seth Rex said:
good work.
At 12:03:58 AM on 12/2/2002, JPJunkee said:
Thanks Dark Hunter, Carnotaur3, Yvonne, and Dino-Dude. Glad you all liked what you've read so far.
-- JPJunkee
At 11:39:20 PM on 12/1/2002, Dino_Dude said:
Wow, what a great introduction! You deserve full praise for that, its very well set out and very professional.
And a good Prologue too. It's set up nicely, with you knowing what is happening straight away. And then finding out in the last line, that Dr Wu is a traitor!
Very nice start JPJunkee, and you have drawn my attention, which is no east feat. I'll be sure to read more as you post it.
Cheers,
Dino_Dude
At 1:52:16 AM on 12/1/2002, yvonne said:
That was a very good introduction, explaining the story's title right off the bat. Excellent.
And the Prologue was good, as well. Whenever Dodgson gets involved in a story, things tend to go bad. hehe. And Wu ... that traitor!
In just a few short paragraphs, you've gotten me very interested in reading more.
Great job so far, JPJunkee! :)
At 3:26:08 PM on 11/29/2002, Carnotaur3 said:
awesome. Review will be up shortly!
At 1:18:45 AM on 11/29/2002, dark hunter said:
awesome start to a story, loved the intro, very professionally done, and the first part, you really managed to develop the characters well while at the same time managing to move the story along, very well done:
Rating - 8/10
~Dark Hunter
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