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Not a bad adaptation. Certainly, this new demon will keep us reading to see what happens to it
And...that Owl. He kicked almost all ass in the game!
At 8:15:17 PM on 9/18/2003, RaptorVinny500 said:
You need to put in more details and stuff. The scenes go by way too fast. Overall it was an entertaining read, though.
At 2:22:36 PM on 9/18/2003, Darth Chicken said:
Thanks for the comments guys! Chapter four will be up soon.
At 7:03:03 AM on 9/18/2003, Stryderman said:
Cool! Well done, though I feel that the battle scene was rushed. I'm not sure that the addition of Morraiyah is entirely effective, but that remains to be seen.
Keep it up!
At 1:59:02 AM on 9/18/2003, JPJunkee said:
Okay, this chapter seemed just a little bit rushed. The scene with Link was just poorly executed. And while I really did like the opening bit with the King. . . . basically it was just dialogue, I wasn’t even sure it was the King who was talking. His dialogue was good, it sort of created the general feel in which this story is going to have, but there should have been more detail there. I liked the last bit with the owl, hehe, mainly because it’s a magic owl! I don’t remember a whole lot about the Ocarina of Time game, but I remember that owl! He was cool . . . .
Anywho! It wasn’t the best chapter, not as good as I know you are capable of, but I’m still interested in the story, and I shall continue.
-- JPJunkee
At 5:41:43 PM on 9/15/2003, Darth Chicken said:
Thanks,man.
At 4:07:04 PM on 9/15/2003, Mega T.rex 15 said:
Hmm.. I see html doesn't work here...
At 4:06:26 PM on 9/15/2003, Mega T.rex 15 said:
<font color="0066CC">Another great chapter to the story! A good read.</font>
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