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Nice chapter, i liked the fact that even good guys get angry with Denis getting with pissed.
I also loved the return of Mark, that flying scene is imprinted vividly in my mind.
However i found the description of his getting the others to join quite lax, i reckon that maybe you could've beefed that up a bit, making it a lot more interesting for the reader.
I also noticed that in one part where Mark was flying that you lapsed between past and present text.
ie: "...his demonic and angelic wings flapping every minute or so to assure that he STAYS afloat above his once chipper homeland. A long black overcoat REPLACED the leather jacket that he had left Rocky Point with."
Other than those small nit-picks i found it to be an enjoyable if somewhat short chapter.
Rating: 7/10
~Dark Hunter
At 11:31:54 PM on 11/19/2003, JPJunkee said:
Mark the Birdman is back!!!! Woo!
In Mark's absence, Denis kind of took over the role as major badass. Now it seems both of them will be together again -- and so will some new guys -- this should prove to be interesting! Everybody's anxious to kick some spiritual or demonic ass! hehe Good chapter! It was nice to see Mark return, I've been almost partly worried as to when he might be coming back into the story -- as he was the lead character, then it seemed he more or less just dropped off the face of the earth. Anyway, the team of freakazoids is soon to be united, cool! Nice writing for this episode. Jon and Andrea are lovey dovey now, eh? Hmm, kinda saw it coming. I look forward to the next chapter, in hopes of seeing the patron guy getting his head chopped off.
-- JPJunkee
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