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Very cool.
Denis is one cool character, it's nice to see him using some porfanities when he's stressed, like a real person, which i think is one of the best things about this fic, the characters act like real people, even if they aren't human! Very cool.
David's return is also awesome, unexpected, i was beginning to think of David as a bastard for leaving them, then he returned and so did my faith!
The action was cool, i liked it how you never see the demons who are attacking them, only see the indent and Denis firing twin handguns at them.
Very nice chapter, it left me wanting more....give me more!
Rating: 8.5/10
~Dark Hunter
At 11:35:27 AM on 10/23/2003, JPJunkee said:
“Just go; we’re fucked either way!”
Yep, my favorite line of the chapter, hehe.
Good stuff! I liked this chapter a lot. David's return with the mini-bus was something that I did not expect, but it was definitely nice to see. But now the few that were left behind are in a tight spot! Where's Mark, the frickin Jersey Devil thingyamajigger when ya need him? I like how the characters are slowly coming to terms with their responsibilities and stuff, and are becoming heroes of sort. Andria especially has changed over the course of the story. When before she was crying at almost any given moment, now she kind of takes charge of the situation. It's cool.
This chapter had more than a few run-on sentences, but for the most part they didn't take away from the story. Still, watch that in future chapters. I have a problem with writing run-on sentences myself, it's something I need to work on. . . . Anyway! Nice chapter, and I look forward to more. :)
-- JPJunkee
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