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means the user is online now! At 10:02:54 PM on 12/28/2003, yvonne said: I'm glad I got back into this story. And having a little more background info on Mark and his friends was a good idea.
That last paragraph has led me to believe that this Chris will probably turn on Mark at some point, so I'll be watching out for that.
Good job! Moving onto chapter 2 (the missing one). :)
At 7:43:22 AM on 12/1/2003, dark hunter said: Good chapter, nice to get a bit of an insight into mark's character.
The story at the end was very nicely done, it read enjoyably and made me want to read more, like the rest of your damn book >:(
One thing that annoys me a little is your slips into past and present tense, it can become a little confusing and a bit of a put off, just telling you to keep an eye out for it ;)
Rating: 8/10
~Dark Hunter
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