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Awesome chapter! I like the interaction between Kate and John. Great work! =)
At 2:32:34 PM on 10/26/2003, Spinoboy11 said:
Yet, another great chapter. Chase, you have pulled it off again. I would say that Part 2 is better than 1. Here's why:
Again, the interaction between John and Kate is great. Romance is always a great thing to have in a story, and I saw that in this inclusion. You keep this up and we'll be looking at a flawless fan fiction in the character category.
The flashbacks and voice-overs allow you to mentally picture this script as a movie...an illusion I've rarely seen here at Dan's JP3 Page. This is another great plus for the fan fic.
The T-600 action sequences are awesome, and I really became excited reading them. I agree with menikmati on his opinion that you need to give the T-X a bit more action in this story, which will probably happen further on in the fan fic.
Keep up the good work, and you'll bring us an excellent fan fiction. I believe you will do it, too.
-Spinoboy11
At 10:05:17 PM on 10/21/2003, Carnotaur3 said:
hehe, and so you shall see subplots! :)
At 9:54:21 PM on 10/21/2003, menikmati said:
Okay well I'm gonna post my review for part one and two all in one right here.
I'll say I enjoyed the voice overs in the beginning, it seemed to maybe set up the basic theme, plot, or ideas that we are suppose to take away from this. I can also imagine this as a "real" beginning for a new terminator movie. It kinda reminded me of the T3 beginning, but that is good because it created an immediate connection betweeen the two.
As for the characters...I like Connor and Kate. They seem to be the same characters we saw in the movies, with few changes. I think the closest we have to any character development here is the love story between them that is starting to come about. And I must say I enjoyed the "love" scene between them when she was warming his fingers. I thought that was a neccasary scene and I do enjoy romance in films, and this was no exception. At first I thought there was gonna be a conflict between Carlos and John, because of their feelings for Kate (might make a good sub-plot, but isnt truly neccassary for character development for the two).
The action sequences..like the chase in the hospital, the chase down the freeway etc...they are well written and exciting. I could picture this story unfolding before me on the big screen, and being thrilled by these sequences.
I cant really offer any tips on the action sequences..except maybe show more of the TX..but you probably already have that planned. Maybe imply a new weapon on her that we didnt see in T3..just to keep things fresh? And I do hope Arnold shows up soon!
So overall...this has a standard action movie feel to it. I could imagine hollywood throwing something like this together to make some quick bucks on the weekend. I think this relates a lot more to T3 than it does to T2. It seems more of just a popcorn action flick (which isnt a bad thing). I think maybe you need to come up with a little more story telling (i enjoy the V.O. and flashbacks..they add a sort of sadness and realism). Maybe try to develop a bigger and deeper relationship between John and Kate throughout the rest of the movie. Basically find a way to implement a sub-plot to help with character development. A movie like this doenst need non-stop action o be considered good.
So keep up the good work, and I look forward to reading more of this. And so far, with the help of the opening segments and what not..I think it is very easy to draw out themes in this script, and imply what the title means and what the title may bring to this story. Overall, I like this script...I could imagine this on the big screen and packaged as a special edition DVD. :)
Hope this helped :)
At 6:26:51 PM on 10/18/2003, theriddler said:
great. I have a question carnotaur. A few of my friends are making a film about Terminators. Just for fun. They wanted me to ask you if they could use your title
At 8:07:39 AM on 10/15/2003, Darth Chicken said:
Very cool. :)
At 8:00:58 PM on 10/13/2003, IngenRaptor said:
Nice
Cant wait for Part 3
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