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Dark: Yeah, it seems that way, but trust me, he's not guessing.
At 10:40:05 AM on 7/12/2003, TBatman said:
This whole story is decent so far, but it;s tough now to write a Batman story withoutdoing something that's already been done -- for it too be interesting -- something BIG in the Bat-universe has to happen, for instance, "No-Man's Land", "Knightfall" -- those storylines are intersting. No offense, but it just seems really uninteresting and mediocre.
At 7:23:53 AM on 7/12/2003, dark hunter said:
It was a bit of a downer this chapter. Like Junkee said, it seemed like Batman somehow guessed how deludion came to be.
The end dialogue seemed a little forced and a bit too quick. Unfortunately it all happened rather too quickly for my liking with Jennifer running from Bruce. I mean it skipped a total of four days in little more than a paragraph.
Also i thought the Cronies were few and far between but now there's heaps of them.
Other than that the action between Batman and the Cronies was good and it didn't seem like you really had to try to write it, it just flowed.
Rating: 6.8/10
~Dark Hunter
At 9:47:41 AM on 7/11/2003, Carnotaur3 said:
I wonder what you think of Batman and Robin.
At 1:21:47 AM on 7/11/2003, TBatman said:
After being a Bat-fan all my life, and loving the franchise with a passion, knowing every in and out of Batman, I five it One star * out of Four stars ****. If you'd like suggestions, e-mail me.
At 2:50:43 PM on 7/8/2003, Carnotaur3 said:
Troy must have been a mistake. I'll change that.
At 2:46:21 PM on 7/8/2003, JPJunkee said:
Okay, I noticed something in this chapter. It seems that Deludion's real name tends to change every now and then. One chapter he is Troy, and the next chapter he is Tod. . . . .hmm?
'BATMAN
I know Deludion isn’t what he seems to be. He wasn’t brought up as a killer, he became one. Like a high-school nerd who gets murder into his mind following his long and torturous past.'
How, umm, how exactly did he come to that conclusion? Seems to me that that one kind of came out of no where.
The action was nice, and the parts with Bruce and Jennifer worked well. Though, the ending scene kind of appeared too suddenly, and seemed out of place, I think.
Not all bad. But, the story needs more feeling and heart, in my opinion.
-- JPJunkee
At 12:59:17 AM on 7/8/2003, tobycompy2.0 said:
It was kind of cool, has a sort of Joel Schmuacher feel to it, I don't know why, it could just be me, but I thought it was pretty good, you have written much better, though, Chase.
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