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Still pretty good... However Philips placed his briefcase on the table twice. LOL. There are a few other odd errors, but it was still pretty good none the less.
At 2:37:16 PM on 7/12/2003, SpinoMonkey said:
I love it!
At 11:20:37 AM on 7/8/2003, Carnotaur3 said:
There isn't potential, he already is a good writer.
At 1:26:17 PM on 6/26/2003, Dino-Snore said:
You have a Great Potential Amber to be a Good Writer....
At 12:44:07 AM on 6/22/2003, yvonne said:
Yes, the story really is interesting, I agree. I like the way you've brought the 2 new characters in so far, too.
You also have a good eye for details, since I can picture a lot of the scenes in my head.
You might want to take a look at the word "here" though. A lot of the time, you should be using "hear" instead, so just be on the lookout for that.
I'll read more when I have the chance. It's pretty good so far. :)
At 4:39:50 PM on 4/1/2003, JPJunkee said:
Pretty good work. The writing is solid, and the story shows promise.
-- JPJunkee
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