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Once again, I'm still just not sure if this really is a sequel to the novels or the movies... However Sarah's hair is now a mix of the two versions. In TLW novel she had SHORT BLACK hair, and in the movie she had LONG RED hair. Now in this she has LONG BLACK hair... It's just too confusing.
Malcolm and Grant on the other hand were ok for the most part. I liked that you mentioned Henry Wu being in one of the pictures though... However reading Martin's comments really reflect in my mind. He is right in a lot of ways. This thing does seem a lot like TLW novel... However when I was getting ready to read this, I was thinking that this would be a prequel to the first JP or some kind of sequel to the movies that had Hammond restarting his park and all... This is definately something much different...
At 1:41:44 PM on 5/22/2003, Amber said:
i seem to need help in those portions of writing. Capturing an old charater.
I'm trying to bring out a new Ian, and give him a nre view on life... I will bring him out more in my next chapters.
At 11:48:26 PM on 5/20/2003, JPJunkee said:
The little details about Malcolm and Grant's past was well written. You really seemed to have captured the essence of their characters in the narrative. But, when it moved to the dialogue, they just didn't seem like Ian and Alan anymore. They seemed like totally new characters, without the special voice or demeanor of Ian or Alan.
-- JPJunkee
At 9:52:33 AM on 5/20/2003, MartinRandle said:
It is a very well written intro - but seemingly not actually going anywhere yet.
Part of the problem is that it reads like the start of TLW the novel in as much that the audience is in on the story but the characters are learning. However, Tim knows very much what went on as did Alan and Ian. So I feel the descriptions of the raptor attacks is set in a way to tantalise the audience - but you can't do that 'cause we are in on the knoledge!
Also logically so are the characters as, following the films, the whole world knows that dinosaurs exist! Hubia myths or not, anything resembling a dinosaur would not be a real mystery in a world where dinosaurs are known to exist.
It feels like you are going through the motions of re-writing TLW. I would like to see a fresher approach and see "Hammonds Dream" from maybe Hammonds perspective.
Great writing skills Amber, but I would love to see you really innovate!
At 2:16:25 PM on 3/27/2003, Amber said:
well, let me run down the charaters for you...
Jack and Rebecca Fiels: Tourists, they are no longer in the story so forget them....
Derrick Carter is a paleontologist and Clay is his undergrad assistant.
Alan Grant and ian Malcolm, well, you know them. Sarah Harding, again, you know her....
Scott Philips, one of the heads of the dept. of biology of costa rica.
Antonio and julio are high govt. officials and also heads of the dept. of biology for costa rica. (and comrad of Scott Philips)....
Amanda,...she is a paleontologist recruited by carter to help out with the expedition...
Tim, all should know who this is....same Tim of "Tim and Lex", as in Hammond's grandkids...
There are still a few more charaters to be anounced, don't worry, once you hear more about them, it will be more clear what there roles will be....
At 9:38:24 PM on 3/26/2003, Crisco said:
i like it a lot, the story looks promising. the only thins i don't like is that i can't follow all the characters, it seems like there's a lot, maybe things will change, anyhow i like your story and will be sure to continue readin it
At 9:36:05 PM on 3/26/2003, Dr. Love said:
After all these time Ian still have his battered old Ford. Or maybe he always buys old Fords and batters them... LOL
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