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Well... I'm a bit confused... Where is Alan Grant? Does he no longer run Hell Creek's dig sites? Near the end of the chapter you repeated the whole thing about the man "Guitierrez" talking to Grant at the hotel, so it seemed a little off there... Tim seems ok for the most part, but a little of the dialogue, expecially the ending dialogue with the phone conversation seemed a bit weird and out of place.
At 4:42:33 PM on 4/1/2003, JPJunkee said:
Aside from a few errors in grammar, and a few sentences that seemed to be worded wrong, this was pretty good. I am hoping to see more character in Tim though. . . I wish I could say more about what exactly that comment is supposed to mean, but that'll have to wait till a later chapter.
-- JPJunkee
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