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I hate that I'm just now getting to read this, but better late then never. I really liked the beginning. It had good character development and a nice little mystery to go along with it. Nice job.
At 8:05:55 PM on 7/7/2003, Carnotaur3 said:
I don't feel for the characters yet, but I don't expect to at this point. I like the discriptions you use and crap, it's awesome. Once I'm done reading I believe 10 more parts of this expect a review of the whole story.
At 5:07:39 PM on 7/3/2003, SpinoMonkey said:
I sat at the edge of my seat! Vary good, I'll make sure I read the rest!
~SpinoMonkey~
At 1:13:17 PM on 6/26/2003, Dino-Snore said:
Woah, very shocking, I also thought everyone was gonna end up in a Dino Gut!
At 12:12:47 AM on 6/22/2003, yvonne said:
I thought this was going to end up with everyone dead by the time the prologue was finished. What a nice surprise. :)
You've managed to make me like the Fields couple already, gotten me to feel bad for poor Lupe, and have interested me enough to want to know what happens next ... so bravo! :)
Like Junkee said, there were a few grammar errors and some things repeated, but I think it was written well. I was impressed. :)
Moving on to the next part.....
At 10:11:56 AM on 3/27/2003, Amber said:
Thanks for the info Junkee, and, please comment on my chapters, I need feedback...
Feedback so I can improve or change, or at least know who i reading my chapters...if no one reads, no one writes....
At 11:36:33 PM on 3/25/2003, JPJunkee said:
Very good. There were a few grammar errors here and there, and a few unneeded and repeated details, but nothing too distracting. All in all, it was a good read. Keep it up!
-- JPJunkee
At 9:19:50 PM on 3/25/2003, Amber said:
Thanks Goodbytes, and yes, there may ba a surprising twist to Lupe's death...
More coming soon, ...very soon....
At 8:54:14 PM on 3/25/2003, CeratosPit said:
Tch. I can't believe it, eh. The raptor ate up Lupe?
At 3:18:28 PM on 3/25/2003, Mr Goodbytes said:
Nice! Can't wait to read more. Very good start.
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